Comparison of Children's writing

  

'Nature'. Kyra Hollingsworth: Year 4 student

'California' Denise Svoboda: Year 6 student

The year 4 student uses simple declarative's. The simple sentence's are repetitive,  they each begin with the pronoun 'This' which shows the child may not be very knowledgeable of vocabulary at this stage. There are no conjunctions used, at stage 2, the consolidation stage, the conjunction 'and' is usually used by the child. The child may not be familiar with using compound sentences. This stage is usually when the child is up to age 6. The child will be at the age 8-9. The child uses pictures, recognising the different bird types having different proper nouns. The child writes the words as they sound, which is also stage two. She writes 'magpiy' instead of 'magpie'. There are many spelling errors of the bird types, this may be due to the names being complex. She has invented her own names for the birds such as a 'signing', 'loh taltit' and 'tree otiepe'. The year 4 students is familiar of the bird 'Robin' this may be because it is a popular bird, and it is spelt how it sounds.